I find your work fascinating. It can be quite surprising how much of a difference a few select words can make to a grey sentence. It made me wonder how I might add some colour to a basic sentence.
The man walked down the street.
With a gait slowed by the loss of youth, slowly the man with no hint of colour left in his hair walked unsteadily down the tree lined street ignored by all but a small dog cautiously following him.
Writing is fun. The more we write, the better we get. It’s like learning to play a sport. We need practise but, unlike sport where a game comes and goes, we can keep our writing forever and share our experiences with the world.
Keep writing. Who knows what great stories you might one day write. :)
Hello Year 4,
ReplyDeleteI find your work fascinating. It can be quite surprising how much of a difference a few select words can make to a grey sentence. It made me wonder how I might add some colour to a basic sentence.
The man walked down the street.
With a gait slowed by the loss of youth, slowly the man with no hint of colour left in his hair walked unsteadily down the tree lined street ignored by all but a small dog cautiously following him.
Writing is fun. The more we write, the better we get. It’s like learning to play a sport. We need practise but, unlike sport where a game comes and goes, we can keep our writing forever and share our experiences with the world.
Keep writing. Who knows what great stories you might one day write. :)
@RossMannell
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia